He was running away from the world’s first fire breathing dragon. His name was AC and he was 16 and he was living in a village named “Wash Board abs.” This was where AC was born and raised here. His family is not that big because his dad was going was in a big army. That army was going ageist the world’s first fire breathing dragon. Sadly that army had lost ageist that dragon. The only people that are in his family are his mom and his little brother that is 2 years old. AC would always work out everyday to be able some day to defeat the dragon. He would run 5 miles, lift enough logs to weigh 100 pounds, and then at the end of the day he would have a good night sleep and prepare for the next day. That’s what AC did when he was little, maybe the age around 7 or 8. What he does now is runs 10 miles and lifts enough logs to weigh about 250-300 pounds. AC is now 18 and he thinks that he is ready to fight the dragon. He goes to his mother and tells her that he is ready. His mom said that he is not ready for him to go because he doesn’t want him to die from the dragon. His mom started crying because she doesn’t want to take place of his dad. AC went out for his morning jog and he say the dragon flying in the shy. AC said to himself, why he is flying in circles? AC ran closer to where the dragon was flying and the dragon was attacking an army. It was AC’s turn to go and defend that army. He was running as fast as a Jaguar. When he got over there it turned out that there was still a guy with a rocket launcher, and guy with a AK-47 and a guy with a pistol. AC was running away from the dragon because he was running to a cliff and he was going to jump off that and attack the dragon. He did that and landed right on top of the dragons head. The guy with the rocket launcher shot the dragon in the leg and the other guys shot the dragon in the other leg and the dragon fell to the ground and AC destroyed the dragon. It turns out that he was ready AC ran home to wash board to tell his mom that he defeated the dragon but she had died.
You have a good beginning in your concept, but as a hook, this may be a little to much. Character development is always important, but drawing it out over time can keep the reader from becoming overwhelmed by details. Consider what information you would be able to pull out, which you could instead place in following paragraphs.
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