Cole was walking into a room that he had never been into before in his life. This room is my bedroom and he doesn't know what to do and thinks that being in my room is kind of weird. Cole acts likes something is going to happen to him if he moves an inch because when ever he is walking around my room, I always walk right next to him. Cole smelt like he hadn't took a shower in decades. He did not look like he was one of those people that didn't take a shower until he was told to.
When Cole told me about his story when he smashed his friends head into the ground and was forced to either go to jail or go into a circle group. He told me he chose to do the circle group and he was forced to go to an island all by himself and he had to stay there for 1 hole year. It sounded like he was having a hard time at life. Cole also told me when he came off the island, he had become a better man.
You might want to add a simile or a metaphor and some more physical description.
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